Trying a different form
I like how the opening and closing lines frame the poem, and the line breaks create a sort of speedy breathlessness that fits the topic well. I like the concrete details, especially "milk-churn stomach"
Thank you muchly
Intriguing, clever, and - this is the best bit - relatable! Awesome, Tamsin!
Thank you. 🥰 I wasn’t sure it would be any good.
I like how the opening and closing lines frame the poem, and the line breaks create a sort of speedy breathlessness that fits the topic well. I like the concrete details, especially "milk-churn stomach"
Thank you muchly
Intriguing, clever, and - this is the best bit - relatable! Awesome, Tamsin!
Thank you. 🥰 I wasn’t sure it would be any good.