Wow. I was totally absorbed in this poem all the way through. I can see places where it could be tightened, but wow--it's amazing, especially for a first draft.
More marination makes sense. It’s such a rich, layered set of poems. I don’t know how to say this without sounding jealous in a mean way, but I wish I had written this! It’s such a gorgeous concept.
What an incredible portrayal of loss on both sides. I went on to imagine that the love they had been writing to had already let go and had been waiting and writing also.
Heartbreaking, humourous, horrific, perfect.
Thank you very much!
Oh. Oh. That humour totally gave me a false sense of security. Which was very clever. I can see why this one got accepted 👏
It has changed slightly here’s what they did with it https://thegroke.org/issue-1
Such an interesting idea!
My dreams are wicked
Wow. I was totally absorbed in this poem all the way through. I can see places where it could be tightened, but wow--it's amazing, especially for a first draft.
Thank you. I have only changed a couple of words so far, I’m letting it marinade in itself for bit,
More marination makes sense. It’s such a rich, layered set of poems. I don’t know how to say this without sounding jealous in a mean way, but I wish I had written this! It’s such a gorgeous concept.
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Ghoulishly good, Tamsin!
Thank you Thomas
What an incredible portrayal of loss on both sides. I went on to imagine that the love they had been writing to had already let go and had been waiting and writing also.
Thank you. Maybe they were in a different cemetery and they couldn’t travel between.
Yikes, that was discomfiting! 😱
Apologies - does it need a trigger warning?
Ooh, I've no idea of the protocol I'm afraid. And no filters either, so not the best person to ask!
Very clever piece though!