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Martin Hughes's avatar

A Short Summer Love is particularly evocative. Thanks for sharing these!

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Tamsin's avatar

You are welcome, thanks for subscribing too ☺️

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

I like how these are all from a list of very simple summer prompts, but they came out *so* differently. I can feel "Rain tinged warming breezes" very clearly.

I LOVE how the grass leads into a piece of a story. This is beautiful:

"this short short grass, remind me of

the long grasses of then, waving above us,

uncut, seeding now, drifting fronds"

This ending hits soft but hard at the same time:

"saw you turn from my view

declare your autonomy

and lowered my lens"

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Tamsin's avatar

Thank you Margaret, that’s what I was trying to do, not make generic summer poems.

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Nelly Bryce's avatar

Yes! I like this about them too. My favourite, hmm, I can’t resist the second one, it’s that grass for me ❤️

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Janey Thompson's avatar

Ooh, I like the second one in particular 🙂 - and I 'wanted' the first one to be an haiku.

I like 5-7-5, which I find gives me enough rhythm and structure without being too restrictive . And I like its challenge too x

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Tamsin's avatar

I’ve been researching haiku, and sometimes I like the 575 (which actually isn’t necessary) and sometimes I want to concentrate on the 1st and 3rd lines being able to stand as a separate identity, and sometimes I want the 2nd line to punch a different view, this time I just wanted flowing thoughts without any restrictions. I could very possibly rework it into a haiku with more work, and probably will just for the hell/fun of it.

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Janey Thompson's avatar

Sometimes it's fun to swap the first and third lines too 😁

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Tamsin's avatar

Here you go

Rain tinged breezes

abating morning hay-fever

Bountiful gardens.

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Tamsin's avatar

Yes, this is fun too

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Ellen Clayton's avatar

I love these!! That second one is my favourite I think, it’s so gorgeous and sensual.

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Tamsin's avatar

Thank you very much ☺️😁.

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