I like this a lot Tamsin - clever idea and quite mystical in a woolly sort of way. Have you tried removing some of the "ands" / "ans" ? It might make it even more magical. Sorry you're feeling rubbish - well done for wrtiing!
Sorry to hear you're in a crash at the moment, hope it passes quickly, despite the brain fog your poem is great, much more than I can manage mid fog!!!
I credit the Lions Mane tablets, without them I’m just nothing. Barely a neuron fires. And thank you, it needs lots of work still, it doesn’t fit my vision of it yet.
Well, this is freaking gorgeous. I'm so glad you shared it. This feels like way more than you're giving it credit for.
You are really very kind.
Not kind—just truthful 💛.
❤️
I suppose I know what I want it to be, and this isn’t anywhere near it, but maybe that’s a different poem altogether.
I like this a lot Tamsin - clever idea and quite mystical in a woolly sort of way. Have you tried removing some of the "ands" / "ans" ? It might make it even more magical. Sorry you're feeling rubbish - well done for wrtiing!
Yes it needs a lot of revision, I'd also like the pattern notes to actually make something.
Oh that would be amazing - a physical manifestation of the poem! Honestly I think it's a really good piece - such an innovative idea.
Sorry to hear you're in a crash at the moment, hope it passes quickly, despite the brain fog your poem is great, much more than I can manage mid fog!!!
I credit the Lions Mane tablets, without them I’m just nothing. Barely a neuron fires. And thank you, it needs lots of work still, it doesn’t fit my vision of it yet.
🫂, hoping the unaccustomed warmth and sunshine will make it's way into your bones xx
I am very much enjoying the sunshine and warmth 🌞🌞🌞🌞